Final Cut Draft 2 - Teachers Feedback and Comments

Today we have shown Mr Michie our improved version of our opening for there feedback and comments on how to improve it.

Below is our improved version: 

Improvement and Teachers Comments:

Flows a lot better.

An extremely pleased with it overall

Lengthen the title' The Game' for another second - So that it can be read.

Lengthen alarm - So this it start before the actors start to run on to the screen as the running start a little to quick.

These are the final improvements to be made to the opening before the deadline of the 30th and now this will hopefully give us the best chance of getting a high grade as now it is of the best quality we can do.

Final Cut Draft 1 - Teachers Feedback and Comments

Today we have shown our improved rough cut to your teachers for there feedback and comments on how to improve it before the deadline.

Below is our improved rough cut: 

Improvement and Teachers Comments:

Take out the photos at the beginning - After changing it all around the photos don't work any more, they do not fit in with the sequence. 

Add in more footage of the MI5 scene - As the photos are being remove there needs to be more of the MI5 scene to keep it at 2 minutes.

Change order of credits - The order of the credits need to be change it to fits with a traditional order for a title sequence. The new order shown be:

- Canterbury Productions Presents

- An AJA Production

- The Game

- Actors Names

- Crews Names and Titles (finishing with director) 

Music transition is to slow - At the moment the transition leaves the audience think that there will be more to come, a faster transition will stop this feel. 

From the beginning after the photos to the title sequence it flows well.

The alarm audio level decreases as the character is running away -  This is good as it add perspective and identifies to the audiences that the male lead is running away.

Adjust the voice level in the MI5 scene - At the moment it is fluctuates and makes it obvious that they are different moments in time.    

The varied shots within the MI5 scene is good.

The feedback has helped us identify new areas to work on and improve for the final deadline. Now we need to improve the title sequence to achieve the highest level of quality giving us the best chance to get a high grade. We need to make this amendments before the March 30th as that is our final deadline.

Re-shoot - Thursday 22nd March

Yesterday we have plan to re-shoot some close up of the MI5 scene. This was preferable than re-shooting the Cafe Rouge scene as we have reorder the sequence to the ending is now at the beginning and the beginning is at the end. This creates a better dramatic feel to the sequence and entices the audience quicker than before. As a result of this the Cafe Rouge dialogue has been cut out. This left us with an opportunity to re-shoot something else that need attention. This was the close ups for the MI5 scene. However the room we used last time for the MI5 scene was being used so we had to use a different room, However this was okay as we where doing close up a did not need to see the room and as every room as a white board we could use any where. The room we chose to use however had a different light condition to the last room we used. So even with all the blinds closed there was still to much light comeing through. We still shoot what we need to shoot and decided to level the "Brightness and Contract" of the footage to match the other footage in the edit using Premiere Pro.

Over all yesterday was a good days filming as we completed all that we need to and now are a step close to completing our title sequence. Now we need to lower the brightness and contract of that footage and complete the other improvements.

Rough Cut - Teachers Feedback and Comments

Today we have shown our rough cut to Mr Michie and Mr Ford for there feedback and comments on how to improve it.

Below is our rough cut: 

Improvement and Teachers Comments:

Re-shoot Cafe Rouge scene -  There is background noise of cars driving past and wind, this is not acceptable as it does not fit in with the continuity of the weather but also it is extremely of putting from the title sequence.  

Sound for title sequence - We did not find any music that we thought would be apropet for our title sequence before the deadline for the rough cut. We though it would be better not put music in there we where not happy with. So we need to find music that is appropriate for our genre.  

Change the order of the title sequence -  The teacher thought that the ending sense (5 year earlier) was stronger than our beginning scene (MI5) so we extend to change a new sequence where the ending it at the being and the begin is at the end, however, the London landmark with stay in the same place. We them will compare with one we prefer.  

Re-shoot the exchanging of briefcase - There is comic facia expression on our male lead that does not fit will our genre and therefore may need to be re-shot. 

"AJA Productions" needs to be slowed down - The magnifying glass scroll across the screen to fast and may make it hard for the audience to read in the time available.    

Blue print title sequence needs to be slowed down -  The lines and names more in and out to fast for the audience to read. Each name need to be on the screen for 3 to 4 seconds.

Cross dissolve from photos to MI5 scenes need to be lengthen - The cross dissolve is to fast and and is unnoticeable and therefor a connection is not made by the audience.

Our teachers feedback, has brought to our attention the errors that are in our title sequence and that we have made. Also how we can improve our opening before the final deadline to achieve the highest standard and grades. The errors that have been pointed out to us are small issues however effect the whole opening. There is little time to complete the improvements before our final deadline, but I think with a little commitment and tweaking we can achieve it.